P3+NPlascencia

A. Thesis statement and essay unity.


 * //A government or business would need to consider if introducing a non-native species to another country would be benneficial or destructive to an environment as well as the monetary and long term effects.//**

1. Does the thesis statement I have written at the end of the essay really express the main point that I make in the essay? ([|TS 2])
 * Yes, my thesis at the end of the essay really expresses the main point that I make in the essay.**

2. Does the thesis statement reflect everything in the essay? Does the essay develop everything in the thesis statement? ([|TS 3])
 * No, the thesis statement reflects almost everything in the essay, but not neccessarily everything. I do believe that my essay developes everything in my thesis.**

3. Does the thesis statement make a positive statement rather than a negative one? ([|TS 5])
 * My thesis statement is neither negative or positive**.

4. Does your thesis posit an argument that is actually worth arguing? What is that argument?
 * My thesis does not neccessarily make a point that is actually worth arguing. My argument is that there could be "benneficial or negative effects" for introducing a non-native species to a new environment.**

5. Is every clause in the thesis statement in the active voice? ([|TS 6]) (List the subjects and verbs of each clause in your thesis statement below to illustrate your answer.)
 * No, every caluse in the thesis statement is not in the active voice. (government or business //would// need to consider)**

6. Does your thesis statement answer the questions "why?" and "how?" to the satisfaction of a doubting reader? Your thesis statement, of course, will not support or explain or provide evidence of why or how, but it should state the reasons why it is true if these will be discussed in the essay. ([|TS 4])
 * No, my thesis statement does not answer the "why" and "how", but it rather answers the "what". My thesis simply states what the governments and businesses should do.**

7. Is your thesis statement clear [|(TS 7)], precise and limited ([|TS 8]), controversial or informative ([|TS 9]), and defensible ([|TS 10])?
 * My thesis statement is not really clear or precise. It is limited and somewhat informative and it does not have enough substance that must be defended.**

B. Introduction and conclusion.

__Introduction:__ As both producers and consumers, humans are well aware that a change in the environment could have catastophic effects. Nonindigenous species introduced to a new environment could have good or bad results. //**A government or business would need to consider if introducing a non-native species to another country would be benneficial or destructive to an environment as well as the monetary and long term effects.**// __Conclusion:__ In conclusion, introducing a non-native species could have negative effects on the environment due tot unwanted results, unintentional spreading, monetary costs, and people's wishes. Abusiness or government should take thsese all into close consideration before transferring a hardy, nonindigenous species to anothr country.

1. Is your first paragraph interesting? Does it provide concrete and specific material that is likely to catch the reader’s attention and focus it on your topic? (2d)
 * No, I don't think that my first paragraph is very nteresting. No, it does not provide concrete a specific material because it is the opening paragraph and you are not soposed to put that information in there.**

2. Do you make a clear contract with the reader? Please summarize what you believe your contract is.
 * I dont know what kind of contract is made with the reader, so I can't really summarize it.**

3. Does the conclusion of your essay satisfy your contract with the reader? How? (2d)
 * Well, I would say that my conclusion is satisfyign enough for the essay, but again, I dont exactly know what kind of contract is made so I can't really say if the reader was satisfied with the contract.**

C. Body

//**Topic sentace:**// By far, the biggest concern about introducing a nonindigenous species to another country or area would be- "what effect will it have?" //**Topic sentace:**// Another huge concern about importing a non-native species is no one will know if that species will spread and take over the surrounding environment. //**Topic sentace:**// Another important matter in introducing a nonindigenous species is the monetar and long-term effects dealing with the human population. //**Best paragraph**//: Another huge concern about importing a non-native species is no one will know if that species will spread and take over the surrounding environment. In __Source B__, this is proved by how SARS was unintentionally spread to more than 2 dozen countries, possibly due to it being carried by animals. This effect was unpredicted and uncontrollable (for the most part) and it tool a major toll on the environment. Another example of unintentional and negative effects was when the balsam woolly adelgids anillated the balsam dir tress in the US. (__Source A__)These insects were unintentionally imported, and this unintentional imprortation could happen anywhere, anytime, without any knowledge of it. This could happen by getting mixed in with grain, crates, in a ship's hull, etc. (__Source E)__ Non-native species are constantly being introduced unintentionally and causing undesired results.


 * //Worst paragraph//**: Another important matter in introducing a nonindigenous species is the monetar and long-term effects dealing with the human population. When an outcreak occurs, it costa people and the government money to control and subdue it. This factor must not be overlooked when deciding introduce a non-native species. Alos, the government also must inquire about the people's opinion, because the desired effects may not be disired by all.

1. Do the paragraphs of your essay move in a logical direction? Does the reader have the experience of getting someplace, of answering questions and moving toward a point? Or does the essay jump around for no apparent reason? Evaluate the overall organization of your essay briefly, and then point out where you think the transition between paragraphs is strongest and where it is weakest? 2. Evaluate the overall organization of your essay briefly, and then point out where you think the transition between paragraphs is strongest and where it is weakest? 3. Would your essay be persuasive to someone who doubts your thesis statement? What qualities of evidence or support would make it so? ([|DIH 2.4]) In particular, list your specific examples and clear, vivid cases that illustrate and support your points. Do you write about actual people in the essay? Where could you make the essay more interesting by adding a story, and example, or a more specific explanation? Are there places where you should introduce a source more clearly or fully or where a citation needs to be provided and corrected? 4. In the essay, do you answer the question "How do you know?" of every claim you make in such a way that a doubting reader would be satisfied? Evaluate the overall quality of the evidence you use in the essay, then comment on where you think your evidence is strongest and where you think it is weakest. ([|DIH 2.4]) 5. Is the evidence introduced and explained clearly and cited correctly, when necessary, in accordance with MLA citation and list of works cited format? ([|DIH 2.4], 31a 1 and 3)
 * The paragraphs of my essay move in a logical order. No, I do not think that the reader has the experience of getting somplace, or answering questions, or moving toward a point because my essay is so weak that there is no point at all to answer a question. My essay does not jump around for no apparent reason at all. I believe that the organization of my essay is lacking in accordance with my thesis, which is lacking as well. I think that I have no strongest transition between paragaphs at all and my weakest transition is a tie between all of my body paragraphs.**
 * I believe that the organization of my essay is lacking in accordance with my thesis, which is lacking as well. I think that I have no strongest transition between paragaphs at all and my weakest transition is a tie between all of my body paragraphs.**
 * My thesis does not have much to doubt, so I honestly can't say if it is persuasive or not to the reader. I do not write about actual people in my essay. It would make my essay more interesting if I had gone into greater detail instead of just reffering to my factual information as Source A, Source B, etc. Yes, there are always more places wherer I could introduce a source more clearly or fully and there are most definately places where I could have inputed citations instead of just refering to the documents.**
 * No, I do not answer the question "How do you know?" of every claim I make because I leave a lot of my statements open-ended without persuing greater explanation. I believe that the overall quality of evidence of my essay is adequit becuase it gets the job done. I think my evidence was strongest when I refered to the SARS infection in __Source B__. I think that my evidence was the weakest when refering to the toads in Australia.**
 * I do believe that the evidence is introduced and explained clearly and cited correctly and in accordance with MLA citation.**

6. Does each sentence in each paragraph lead to or from the central point (the topic sentence)? (2a) What is your most coherent paragraph? What your least? 7. Is every paragraph fully developed? (2c) Which are and which aren’t? What is your best developed paragraph and what your worst? 8. Is this essay clearly written and relatively free of errors in grammar, spelling, and usage? (5d) What are your most frequent errors?
 * For the most part, each sentace in each paragraph leads to the central point, each are just a little weak. My most coherant paragraph is my third and my least is my second.**
 * No, every paragraph is not fully developed. They are all equally bad, none of them are particularly good.**
 * My essay is not as clearly written as it could have been and I'm sure that it contains errors in grammar, spelling, and usage. My most frequent errors are probably runon sentaces.**

Overall: 1. How interesting is this essay? To what kinds of readers would it be more interesting? To what kinds of readers less interesting? What parts are most and what least interesting? Are there parts where readers will be bored or confused? 2. How effective an essay do you believe this is. That is, how successful would this essay be a persuading the other members of the class to believe your thesis statement? Why?
 * Overall, my essay was pretty dull. I think it would be interesting to a naive, ignorant and stupid person who absolutly does not care what they are reading about. It would be less interesting to a person that actually enjoys reading. There are most definatly parts where the reader will be bored and confused, no doubt about it.**
 * I believe that this essay is very uneffective. I dont think that I would persuade many people in my class to believe my thesis statement becasue it is so absolutely boring and dull, and it is horribly supported.**