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Please copy the following questions to your individual page and then enter the appropriate responses. Provide evidence (quote from your own essay) whenever possible. Have fun!!!

A. Thesis statement and essay unity. (Please copy your thesis from your essay here. Please bold face and italicize your thesis.) 1. Does your thesis posit an argument that is actually worth arguing? What is that argument? The argument is that goverm\nments and buisnesses should not repeat history and make the wrong decision.
 * //"Buisnesses and governments should consider the social and economic effects before transferring a hardy not nonindigenous species into their country."//**
 * 1) Does the thesis statement I have written at the end of the essay really express the main point that I make in the essay? ([|TS 2]) **Yes, it expresses the main point i make about how it effects the econmic and social aspects of a country.**
 * 2) Does the thesis statement reflect everything in the essay? Does the essay develop everything in the thesis statement? ([|TS 3]) **There is one point where i vere away from the thesis in talking about killing crops.**
 * 3) Does the thesis statement make a positive statement rather than a negative one? ([|TS 5])
 * My thesis is a positive statement but it needs more power. I suggest what the buissnesses and governments should do rather that what they should not do.**
 * 1) Is every clause in the thesis statement in the active voice? ([|TS 6]) (List the subjects and verbs of each clause in your thesis statement below to illustrate your answer.) **Yes, I use the phase should consider not should have considered**.
 * 2) Does your thesis statement answer the questions "why?" and "how?" to the satisfaction of a doubting reader? Your thesis statement, of course, will not support or explain or provide evidence of why or how, but it should state the reasons why it is true if these will be discussed in the essay. ([|TS 4])
 * It answeres the question why by stateing that they should look at the social and economical effects of their decision but failsin answering how they should check the social and econimal effects of their country.**
 * 1) Is your thesis statement clear [|(TS 7)], precise and limited ([|TS 8]), controversial or informative ([|TS 9]), and defensible ([|TS 10])?
 * I believe my thesisis precise and clear but it is almost too clear and precise. I think I might have needed to expand more.**

B. Introduction and conclusion. Intro! Every country has their own example of an importation of a nonnative plant or animal gone wrong. Species that have been introduced intentionally or accidently have been recorded to reak havic on the global society. Some poeple have benn rallying to introduce nonnative species into poorer nations to help their economies. **//"Buisnesses and governments should consider the social and economic effects before transferring a hardy not nonindigenous species into their country."//** (Please copy your introduction and conclusion from your essay here, labeling each. Please bold face and italicize your thesis.) C. Body
 * 1) Is your first paragraph interesting? Does it provide concrete and specific material that is likely to catch the reader’s attention and focus it on your topic? (2d) **My first paragraph is somewhat interesting but it does not grab the reader.  It is focused though and identifys what the essay is going to be about.**
 * 2) Do you make a clear contract with the reader? Please summarize what you believe your contract is.
 * I do not belive I make clear contract with the reader. I think my essay is kind of all over the place.**
 * 1) Does the conclusion of your essay satisfy your contract with the reader? How? (2d)
 * I did not finish in time to even write a conclusion. So obviously my answear would have to be no.**

(Please copy your topic sentences and your best and worst paragraphs here, labeling each.) ) **I think I backed up each fact pretty clearly so the reader would understand what point was attempting to make.** **My first body paragraph was much more coherent than my second body paragraph.  MY first would have to be ranked the best and my second was second.**  Overall:
 * 1) Do the paragraphs of your essay move in a logical direction? Does the reader have the experience of getting someplace, of answering questions and moving toward a point? Or does the essay jump around for no apparent reason? Evaluate the overall organization of your essay briefly, and then point out where you think the transition between paragraphs is strongest and where it is weakest?
 * From my first aragraph to my second body paragraph is most likely the jumpiest and has the least flow. It talks about two completly dfferent topics making it confusing.**
 * 1) Evaluate the overall organization of your essay briefly, and then point out where you think the transition between paragraphs is strongest and where it is weakest?
 * My essay is organizaed pretty effectivly. The thesis is specific to the entire organization of the essay.**
 * 1) Would your essay be persuasive to someone who doubts your thesis statement? What qualities of evidence or support would make it so? ([|DIH 2.4]) In particular, list your specific examples and clear, vivid cases that illustrate and support your points. Do you write about actual people in the essay? Where could you make the essay more interesting by adding a story, and example, or a more specific explanation? Are there places where you should introduce a source more clearly or fully or where a citation needs to be provided and corrected?
 * I do not belive my argument is strong enough to perssuade someone who does not agree with my thesis. There need to be more backup.**
 * 1) In the essay, do you answer the question "How do you know?" of every claim you make in such a way that a doubting reader would be satisfied? Evaluate the overall quality of the evidence you use in the essay, then comment on where you think your evidence is strongest and where you think it is weakest. ([|DIH 2.4]
 * 1) Is the evidence introduced and explained clearly and cited correctly, when necessary, in accordance with MLA citation and list of works cited format? ([|DIH 2.4], 31a 1 and 3)
 * I cited everything according to MLA format. The reader knows what I am citing.**
 * 1) Does each sentence in each paragraph lead to or from the central point (the topic sentence)? (2a) What is your most coherent paragraph? What your least?
 * 1) Is every paragraph fully developed? (2c) Which are and which aren’t? What is your best developed paragraph and what your worst?
 * Every paragraph was well developed but maybe needed a little more to back up the thesis.**
 * 1) Is this essay clearly written and relatively free of errors in grammar, spelling, and usage? (5d) What are your most frequent errors?
 * There is some grammar mistakes. The mistakes in the essay are more that of punctuation than grammar.**
 * 1) How interesting is this essay? To what kinds of readers would it be more interesting? To what kinds of readers less interesting? What parts are most and what least interesting? Are there parts where readers will be bored or confused?  **The essay is not that effective because my thesis needs more backup in the body paragraphs and a conclusion.**


 * 1) How effective an essay do you believe this is. That is, how successful would this essay be a persuading the other members of the class to believe your thesis statement? Why? **It is not that effective in perssuading someone to believe my thesis because it does not have a enough information**.