P4+ACurtis

A. Thesis statement and essay unity.


 * //When an invasive plant is introduced into a new country or continent it can spread like wildfire.//**
 * 1) Does the thesis statement I have written at the end of the essay really express the main point that I make in the essay? ([|TS 2]) Yes it does because in the essay "Source A shows what can happen to the native species if introduced to a new species from another country or continent."
 * 2) Does the thesis statement reflect everything in the essay? Does the essay develop everything in the thesis statement? ([|TS 3]) Yes it does because it refers to what some of the articles say.
 * 3) Does the thesis statement make a positive statement rather than a negative one? ([|TS 5]) The thesis of this essay makes a positive point because it is informing what can happen when a new species is introduced to an indigenous one.
 * 4) Does your thesis posit an argument that is actually worth arguing? What is that argument? No because the thesis gets straight to the point about what can happen when an invasive species is introduced.
 * 5) Is every clause in the thesis statement in the active voice? ([|TS 6]) (List the subjects and verbs of each clause in your thesis statement below to illustrate your answer.) invasive plant-subject, spread like wildfire-verb
 * 6) Does your thesis statement answer the questions "why?" and "how?" to the satisfaction of a doubting reader? Your thesis statement, of course, will not support or explain or provide evidence of why or how, but it should state the reasons why it is true if these will be discussed in the essay. ([|TS 4]) No it does not.
 * 7) Is your thesis statement clear [|(TS 7)], precise and limited ([|TS 8]), controversial or informative ([|TS 9]), and defensible ([|TS 10])? Yes it is.

B. Introduction and conclusion.


 * //When an invasive plant is introduced into a new country or continent it can spread like a wildfire.When it begins to spread it can be hard to remove or control. In Source B it states: " An almost infinitely complex web of interactions among humans,humans and continents-and an exponentially increasing numbers."-Introducton I believe that the people in Customs or some other high ranking position should have a team of experts go through certain things that are shipped or received world wide to help prevent the invasive species from destroying native plantlife or wildlife. In Source A the photo shows what can happen to the native species if introduced to a new species from another country or continent. - Conclusion//**
 * 1) Is your first paragraph interesting? Does it provide concrete and specific material that is likely to catch the reader’s attention and focus it on your topic? (2d) Yes it does
 * 2) Do you make a clear contract with the reader? Please summarize what you believe your contract is. Yes I believe that I make a good contact with the reader because I focus on how we can stop the spread of invasive species.
 * 3) Does the conclusion of your essay satisfy your contract with the reader? How? (2d) Yes because it sums up the overall thinking.

C. Body


 * //In Source B it states: "An almost infinitely complex web of interactions among humans, animals and continents- and an exponentially increasing numbers." This sentence is saying that more invasive plants and animals are being introduced than one can count. In Source D it states: "Crop killing microbes worry farmers all over the world. Within a few years, the local papaya indusrty had nearly vanished-and so had their livelihood." These sentences show that microbesare not only feared, but they can also destroy how a farmer makes his way of life. When a new microbe is introduced it can help or hurt that crop. Some of the times most invasive species are introduced as accidental or as intentional. When a new species is intoduced as intentional it shows that someone or a group of people want to hurt others.//**
 * 1) Do the paragraphs of your essay move in a logical direction? Does the reader have the experience of getting someplace, of answering questions and moving toward a point? Or does the essay jump around for no apparent reason? Evaluate the overall organization of your essay briefly, and then point out where you think the transition between paragraphs is strongest and where it is weakest? The essay does jump around a little but it follows a logical path.
 * 2) Evaluate the overall organization of your essay briefly, and then point out where you think the transition between paragraphs is strongest and where it is weakest? The strongest point is in the middle and the weakest is toward the end.
 * 3) Would your essay be persuasive to someone who doubts your thesis statement? What qualities of evidence or support would make it so? ([|DIH 2.4]) In particular, list your specific examples and clear, vivid cases that illustrate and support your points. Do you write about actual people in the essay? Where could you make the essay more interesting by adding a story, and example, or a more specific explanation? Are there places where you should introduce a source more clearly or fully or where a citation needs to be provided and corrected? Yes it does because it refers to three of the given sources.
 * 4) In the essay, do you answer the question "How do you know?" of every claim you make in such a way that a doubting reader would be satisfied? Evaluate the overall quality of the evidence you use in the essay, then comment on where you think your evidence is strongest and where you think it is weakest. ([|DIH 2.4]) YEs because of the reference to the sources.
 * 5) Is the evidence introduced and explained clearly and cited correctly, when necessary, in accordance with MLA citation and list of works cited format? ([|DIH 2.4], 31a 1 and 3) Yes it is.
 * 6) Does each sentence in each paragraph lead to or from the central point (the topic sentence)? (2a) What is your most coherent paragraph? What your least? Yes. Most coherent is the middle paragraph and the weakest is the end.
 * 7) Is every paragraph fully developed? (2c) Which are and which aren’t? What is your best developed paragraph and what your worst?
 * 8) Is this essay clearly written and relatively free of errors in grammar, spelling, and usage? (5d) What are your most frequent errors? Yes it is

Overall:
 * 1) How interesting is this essay? To what kinds of readers would it be more interesting? To what kinds of readers less interesting? What parts are most and what least interesting? Are there parts where readers will be bored or confused? This essay is very interesting and to those who aren't interested in the environment it would be less interesting.
 * 2) How effective an essay do you believe this is. That is, how successful would this essay be a persuading the other members of the class to believe your thesis statement? Why? It is somewhat effective and it might convience others if they really want to help save the environment.