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 * //Thesis statement://**


 * The most important items to take into consideration would be, the possible risk involved introducing an invasive creature into a country, the possible payoffs, and the question of whether it is necessary to introduce an invasive species.

//A. Thesis statement and essay unity//**

1) **Does the thesis statement I have written at the end of the essay really express the main point that I make in the essay?** //Answer//: Yes it does. The assignment was to, "evaluate what a business or government agency would need to consider before transferring a hardy but non indigenous species to another country." As you can obviously tell, I gave three considerations, thus accomplishing what I was told to do.
 * //Question and Answers://**

2) **Does the thesis statement reflect everything in the essay? Does the essay develop everything in the thesis statement?** //Answer//: The thesis statement reflects most of what the essay is about. The considerations given in the thesis statement, are the topics which the body paragraphs will go over. The thesis briefly goes over what the essay is asking to do, " The most important items to take into consideration..."

3) **Does the thesis statement make a positive statement rather than a negative one?** //Answer:// The thesis statement make a positive statement, as it avoids making any negative statements.

4) **Does your thesis posit an argument that is actually worth arguing? What is that argument?** //Answer:// Yes, I don't see why not. The argument states the three reasons as to what is going to be argued. The argument

5) **Is every clause in the thesis statement in the active voice?** //Answer:// No, the thesis statement links the topics, but not in an active voice.

//6)// **Does your thesis statement answer the questions "why?" and "how?" to the satisfaction of a doubting reader? Your thesis statement, of course, will not support or explain or provide evidence of why or how, but it should state the reasons why it is true if these will be discussed in the essay.** //Answer:// No it does not.

7) **Is your thesis statement clear, precise and limited, controversial or informative, and defensible?** //Answer//**:** The thesis is somewhat clear, although it answers the question in a manner suggesting the question is asking for the most important things to consider. It is precise, as it does not exceed what is planned to be done. The thesis is also more controversial, because many other people may have other answers to the question. It is also defensible.

//**B. Introduction and conclusion**//

1) **Is your first paragraph interesting? Does it provide concrete and specific material that is likely to catch the reader’s attention and focus it on your topic?** //Answer//**:** The first is rather dull, but straight to the point, "There are many possible negative outcomes, which can come as a result from introducing an invasive species into a country." As proof of the topic sentence, evidence is provided through the sources provided by the prompt, " Source A states, "a photograph of balsam fir trees killed by..."." It may not necessarily catch the reader's attention, but does provide evidence of the topic in question.

2) **Do you make a clear contract with the reader? Please summarize what you believe your contract is?** //Answer:// Yes, the contract is for me, the author of a written essay, to attempt to show and prove my stance it to reader, you.

3) **Does the conclusion of your essay satisfy your contract with the reader? How?** //Answer//**:** No, why? Well, simply because there is no conclusion.


 * //C. Body//**

//Answer:// The paragraphs do mover in a logical direction, although it could have been done with much more strength. The body paragraphs start with what the negatives are ( "There are many possible negative outcomes, which can come as a result from introducing an invasive species into a country. Then moves into the possible positive results, "Considering the possible positive results can also be very necessary." Then its finally moves into the third consideration of, whether it is necessary. To sum it up, it kind of contrast the good, and the bad, then the body moves into whether it is necessary. This kind of allows the reader for him to decided the answer to whether it is a good or bad thing to introduce an invasive species, while still accomplishing my task of providing things to consider.
 * 1) Do the paragraphs of your essay move in a logical direction? Does the reader have the experience of getting someplace, of answering questions and moving toward a point? Or does the essay jump around for no apparent reason?**

2) **Evaluate the overall organization of your essay briefly, and then point out where you think the transition between paragraphs is strongest and where it is weakest?** //Answer:// I like the overall organization, but could have been done better. The strongest transition would be between the contrast of good and bad. "Considering the possible positive results can also be very necessary. " The weakest transition would be, "This all comes down to the next topic of whether it is necessary.

//Answer:// The essay would be somewhat persuasive. It gives some good evidence, like, " destruction of habitats...," and "there is hope that aqua cultural will continue to strengthen its role..." No the essay does not speak of actual people, and I could add a story within the first and second paragraph, making the argument much stronger. The fourth paragraph also needs a source to more clearly develop the argument there, as it only speaks of why, but gives no citation.
 * 3) Would your essay be persuasive to someone who doubts your thesis statement? What qualities of evidence or support would make it so? In particular, list your specific examples and clear, vivid cases that illustrate and support your points. Do you write about actual people in the essay? Where could you make the essay more interesting by adding a story, and example, or a more specific explanation? Are there places where you should introduce a source more clearly or fully or where a citation needs to be provided and corrected?**

satisfied? Evaluate the overall quality of the evidence you use in the essay, then comment on where you think your evidence is strongest and where you think it is weakest?** //Answer:// No, it is answered to some extent using the sources. "...infection directly from animals like civets scientist think..." The evidence provided is pretty good, but more evidence is needed to further prove my side, The evidence is strongest while explaining the possible negative results, which was supported through a picture of dead trees. These dead trees were killed as a result of accidentally imported beetles, (not the band). The weakest is in the fourth paragraph, which has no citation what so ever.
 * 4) In the essay, do you answer the question "How do you know?" of every claim you make in such a way that a doubting reader would be

//Answer:// No the evidence is not cited in MLA citation, only in my brief citation, "Source A states..."
 * 5)Is the evidence introduced and explained clearly and cited correctly, when necessary, in accordance with MLA citation and list of works cited format?**

//Answer//: For the most part, yes they do. This is do to my constant phrase, "This shows..." //(2a):// The most coherent paragraph would be my first paragraph. The least is the fourth paragraph, which has no citation, and was quickly written with much error.
 * 6)Does each sentence in each paragraph lead to or from the central point (the topic sentence)? (2a) What is your most coherent paragraph? What your least?**

//Answer:// No, not every paragraph is written is fully developed. The 1st, and second are well done, while the third is questionable. The fourth, once again blows, and the fifth fails to exist. My best developed essay is the 2nd paragraph, which has the evidence to support the topic, "Source A states...," "Source B states...," while also providing commentary, "This is a prime example of why the ill outcomes need to be considered."
 * 7)Is every paragraph fully developed? (2c) Which are and which aren’t? What is your best developed paragraph and what your worst?**

//Answer:// Haha...no this essay is written at an average level, while it is full of spelling errors. My most frequent errors tends to be the spelling of, "necessary."
 * 8)Is this essay clearly written and relatively free of errors in grammar, spelling, and usage? (5d) What are your most frequent errors?**


 * //Overall://

1) How interesting is this essay? To what kinds of readers would it be more interesting? To what kinds of readers less interesting? What parts are most and what least interesting? Are there parts where readers will be bored or confused?** //Answer:// This essay is not very interesting. It would be interesting to those with a lot of time on their hands. It would be less so to those who have little time to deal with poorly written essays, which are expected to be written at a much higher skill level**.

2)How effective an essay do you believe this is. That is, how successful would this essay be a persuading the other members of the class to believe your thesis statement? Why?** //Answer:// It wouldn't be so effective, because it is poorly written and needs much more improvements.