P3+ACorrea

A. Thesis statement and essay unity.
 * //Some of the things we would need to consider would be the enviroment, the people, and the posibility that the speacies can cause greater problems in the country.//**
 * 1) Does the thesis statement I have written at the end of the essay really express the main point that I make in the essay? ([|TS 2]) Yes, it does because it allows the reader the chance to know what is going to be talked about in each body paragraph.
 * 2) Does the thesis statement reflect everything in the essay? Does the essay develop everything in the thesis statement? ([|TS 3]) The essay does reflect on my thesis because it gives you the topic and the way the essay is going to go.The essay ight devolope something in the thesis but it sometime drifts away from the point that is trying to be made.
 * 3) Does the thesis statement make a positive statement rather than a negative one? ([|TS 5]) The thesis statement make a positive statement because it tell what should be done not what wasn't done.
 * 4) Does your thesis posit an argument that is actually worth arguing? What is that argument? The thesis does present an argument that allows the reader to argue. The argument is the the main thing that need to be considered when decieing to move a species would be the enviroment, the people, and the problems that the animals might cause in the nation they are being moved to.
 * 5) Is every clause in the thesis statement in the active voice? ([|TS 6]) (List the subjects and verbs of each clause in your thesis statement below to illustrate your answer.) No the clauses in the thesis statement are not in the active voice.
 * 6) Does your thesis statement answer the questions "why?" and "how?" to the satisfaction of a doubting reader? Your thesis statement, of course, will not support or explain or provide evidence of why or how, but it should state the reasons why it is true if these will be discussed in the essay. ([|TS 4]) The thesisstatement doesn't provide the answer to the how and why but it does tell you why for one of the suggestions.
 * 7) Is your thesis statement clear [|(TS 7)], precise and limited ([|TS 8]), controversial or informative ([|TS 9]), and defensible ([|TS 10])? My thesis statement in my opinion is suppose to be clear and tells you exactly what it is suppose to mean.

B. Introduction and conclusion.

//**There are many indigenous plants and animals all around the world.People often believe that these things are completly harmless to human nature, but that isn't completly true.Some of these plants may have a negative afecton humanity but can also improve the way of life of others.When deciding wheteher to transfer these species to other countries, businesses and the government have to consider many things.Some of the things they would need to consider would be the enviroment, the people, and the posibility that the speacies can cause greater problems in the country.

Not all species are bad for a country, but one should take some precautions. One should research things to make sure they are ready to have them in their country.We should make educated guesses based on what we know about the area the species will affect, we should consider the population of people arouond the area, and we should always know if we can control the species if it were to get out of hand. these are some things the government and businesses should do before transfering animals or plants around to other countries.**//


 * 1) Is your first paragraph interesting? Does it provide concrete and specific material that is likely to catch the reader’s attention and focus it on your topic? (2d) It might but it doesn't have enought to really catch the attention of the reader and really allow him/ her to get into the reading.
 * 2) Do you make a clear contract with the reader? Please summarize what you believe your contract is. No i do not believe i may clear contact with the reader because the information is mostly just ther with no real support.
 * 3) Does the conclusion of your essay satisfy your contract with the reader? How? (2d) It doesn't, it basically just restates what was said in the previous paragraphs.

C. Body The enviroment is one of the biggest factors one should consider. Another factor that should be considered is the people. The final factor government and businesses should consider would be if they are able to control the species they are importing or exporting to countries.
 * //Topis sentences://**

Another factor that should be considered is the people.people are the ones that can run governments and a business, so it would be in the best interest not to harm them in a bad way.In source B, we see that due to the importing of a foering animal an epidemic of Sars was started. In Febuary of 2003,the illness had spead to more than 2 dozen countries in North America, South America, Europe, and Asia, as stated in source B. Animals and plants dont intentionally, plan to harm the human population but can do so indirectly.When transfering animals and plants government officials should test the animals for any disease. By doing so they would be preventing and outbreak of the kind started in source B from occuring.Animals and plants, dead or alive should be checked to make sure they dont affect the people along the surrounding areas.
 * //The Best://**

The final factor government and businesses should consider would be if they are able to control the species they are importing or exporting to countries. Some countries lack the ability to see the impact the species may have on them. In some cases it may not always be a good one,like we see in Source F. Farmers imported Cane Toads to help them control their own beetle problems.Thinking they would get the same results as other countries who tried this they gave it a shot. To bad luck or what ever you want to call it, their results turned out to be bad. The toads invaded the land and killed their crops and animals.Animals don't always help, they can ruin the economic stability of a whole country as it happened in Source F.
 * //The Worst://**


 * 1) Do the paragraphs of your essay move in a logical direction? Does the reader have the experience of getting someplace, of answering questions and moving toward a point? Or does the essay jump around for no apparent reason? Evaluate the overall organization of your essay briefly, and then point out where you think the transition between paragraphs is strongest and where it is weakest? The essay kind of just jumps around. the overall organization is weak because it lacked the planning process that would of given it a good strong thesis statement.The transitions between paragraphs is very weak in every paragraph and i would say that there is no strong transition..
 * 2) Evaluate the overall organization of your essay briefly, and then point out where you think the transition between paragraphs is strongest and where it is weakest? The overall organization is very weak. some of the thing are all around. and most of the transitions are weak, there is no strong transition.
 * 3) Would your essay be persuasive to someone who doubts your thesis statement? What qualities of evidence or support would make it so? ([|DIH 2.4]) In particular, list your specific examples and clear, vivid cases that illustrate and support your points. Do you write about actual people in the essay? Where could you make the essay more interesting by adding a story, and example, or a more specific explanation? Are there places where you should introduce a source more clearly or fully or where a citation needs to be provided and corrected? No, the essay would not be persuasive to someone doubting the thesis statement. The essay would be more interesting if I added a story to the third paragraph. There are many places were a more clear explanation was needed to get to point across to the readers.
 * 4) In the essay, do you answer the question "How do you know?" of every claim you make in such a way that a doubting reader would be satisfied? Evaluate the overall quality of the evidence you use in the essay, then comment on where you think your evidence is strongest and where you think it is weakest. ([|DIH 2.4]) No the essay does not answer to question stated above and it needs a lot of evidence overall. to my belief there is no stronge point in it, most of the points are weak and lack development.
 * 5) Is the evidence introduced and explained clearly and cited correctly, when necessary, in accordance with MLA citation and list of works cited format? ([|DIH 2.4], 31a 1 and 3) The evidence is stated clearly and sited so that the reader can see were the information was gotten from.
 * 6) Does each sentence in each paragraph lead to or from the central point (the topic sentence)? (2a) What is your most coherent paragraph? What your least? Most sentences are based on the evidence that is presented. The most coherent paragraph woul be the third and the least would be the forth.
 * 7) Is every paragraph fully developed? (2c) Which are and which aren’t? What is your best developed paragraph and what your worst? I don't believe any of the paraghrapgs are developed to a point that will make it very easy for the reader to understand.
 * 8) Is this essay clearly written and relatively free of errors in grammar, spelling, and usage? (5d) What are your most frequent errors? The essay is clearly written and is realitively free of of errors. my most frequent errors are the spelling of things.

Overall:
 * 1) How interesting is this essay? To what kinds of readers would it be more interesting? To what kinds of readers less interesting? What parts are most and what least interesting? Are there parts where readers will be bored or confused? The essay isn't really that interesting. The kind of reader that it would intrest more would be the kind that like reading a buch of facts.The ones that would find it least interesting would be people who enjoy reading thing with a lot of detail. The parts that are most and least interesting are the body paraghs because the give you information that you might have not known but they are just facts so it gets boring.Yes there are parts were the reader will be confused.
 * 2) How effective an essay do you believe this is. That is, how successful would this essay be a persuading the other members of the class to believe your thesis statement? Why? I dont belive that this essay is very effective because it lacks the support need to follow up the fact in the documents.