P4+MAronson

A. Thesis statement and essay unity.

Does the thesis statement I have written at the end of the essay really express the main point that I make in the essay? ([|TS 2]) Does the thesis statement reflect everything in the essay? Does the essay develop everything in the thesis statement? ([|TS 3])
 * //Letting nonnative species live in what is not their native habitat, can produce negative effects.//**
 * Yes. However, it does more of restating the thesis than expressing more of the main point.**


 * Yes, the thesis statement reflects the essay and the essay develops the the thesis statement, but poorly.**

Does the thesis statement make a positive statement rather than a negative one? ([|TS 5]) Does your thesis posit an argument that is actually worth arguing? What is that argument? Is every clause in the thesis statement in the active voice? ([|TS 6]) (List the subjects and verbs of each clause in your thesis statement below to illustrate your answer.) Does your thesis statement answer the questions "why?" and "how?" to the satisfaction of a doubting reader? Your thesis statement, of course, will not support or explain or provide evidence of why or how, but it should state the reasons why it is true if these will be discussed in the essay. ([|TS 4])
 * No, the thesis statement makes a negative statement.**
 * The argument is worth arguing. The argument is for a more thorough inspection of goods that are shipped between countries, focusing on the effects in America.**
 * species=>live effects=>produce**


 * No, my thesis doesn't state the reasons why is it true. It is very general, and my essay elaborates.**
 * 1) Is your thesis statement clear [|(TS 7)], precise and limited ([|TS 8]), controversial or informative ([|TS 9]), and defensible ([|TS 10])?


 * My thesis statement is clear but limited.**

B. Introduction and conclusion. __Introduction__ Nature is all around us. As humans, we need to protect our mother earth. One way we can do this is to be selective in animal and plant species that we let cross into our regions. //**Letting nonnative species live in what is not their native habitat can produce negative effects.**// __Conclusion__ The international import epidemic harms more than a tiny percentage of our folliage. It harms our economy, spreads illness in humans, and kills our forest. **//These negative consequences produced are the result of poor inspection of overseas goods and trades.//** America must act now, before this epidemic spirals out of control. Is your first paragraph interesting? Does it provide concrete and specific material that is likely to catch the reader’s attention and focus it on your topic? (2d) Do you make a clear contract with the reader? Please summarize what you believe your contract is. Does the conclusion of your essay satisfy your contract with the reader? How? (2d)
 * My forst paragraph has a hook, but from then on is not very interesting. It does not provide any concrete and specific material to catch the reader's attention, but it helps focus on my topic.**
 * I don't make a clear contract with the reader. I believe that as a writer, I should inform the reader of what is going on by using the sources I was given. However, I did not make the essay an enjoyable read. I merely summed up what I was given.**


 * The conclusion of my essay doesn't satisfy my contract with the reader because I did not make a clear contract to begin with.**

C. Body

__Best__ __Worst__ Do the paragraphs of your essay move in a logical direction? Does the reader have the experience of getting someplace, of answering questions and moving toward a point? Or does the essay jump around for no apparent reason? Evaluate the overall organization of your essay briefly, and then point out where you think the transition between paragraphs is strongest and where it is weakest? Evaluate the overall organization of your essay briefly, and then point out where you think the transition between paragraphs is strongest and where it is weakest? The only reason my essay would be persuasive to someone who doubts my thesis statement is the fact that I have cited sources. //In 2006, balsam trees were killed due to balsam trees were killed due to balsam woolly adelgis. (Source A)//
 * The United States is one great example of a large collection of invasive species.**
 * Farmers everywhere are worries about their crops.**
 * My essay jumps around for no apparent reason. Overall, my essay is not organized, and does not give a feeling of moving towards a central point.**
 * My transition from my intro to my first body paragraph is the best, simply because it flows. The worst is my third body paragraph. It tries to be more of a hook than a topic sentence.**
 * 1) Would your essay be persuasive to someone who doubts your thesis statement? What qualities of evidence or support would make it so? ([|DIH 2.4]) In particular, list your specific examples and clear, vivid cases that illustrate and support your points. Do you write about actual people in the essay? Where could you make the essay more interesting by adding a story, and example, or a more specific explanation? Are there places where you should introduce a source more clearly or fully or where a citation needs to be provided and corrected?
 * 1) In the essay, do you answer the question "How do you know?" of every claim you make in such a way that a doubting reader would be satisfied? Evaluate the overall quality of the evidence you use in the essay, then comment on where you think your evidence is strongest and where you think it is weakest. ([|DIH 2.4])
 * 2) Is the evidence introduced and explained clearly and cited correctly, when necessary, in accordance with MLA citation and list of works cited format? ([|DIH 2.4], 31a 1 and 3)
 * 3) Does each sentence in each paragraph lead to or from the central point (the topic sentence)? (2a) What is your most coherent paragraph? What your least?
 * 4) Is every paragraph fully developed? (2c) Which are and which aren’t? What is your best developed paragraph and what your worst?
 * 5) Is this essay clearly written and relatively free of errors in grammar, spelling, and usage? (5d) What are your most frequent errors?

Overall:
 * 1) How interesting is this essay? To what kinds of readers would it be more interesting? To what kinds of readers less interesting? What parts are most and what least interesting? Are there parts where readers will be bored or confused?
 * 2) How effective an essay do you believe this is. That is, how successful would this essay be a persuading the other members of the class to believe your thesis statement? Why?